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1.23.10
Jan 23, 2010 0:33:03 GMT -5
Post by Moro Ashford on Jan 23, 2010 0:33:03 GMT -5
Week one critiques! Don't forget to give your insight for everyone. Be completely honest (not cruel, just truthful) and please, do not be hurt by the results you may receive. This is here merely to better you as a writer.
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1.23.10
Jan 23, 2010 0:44:53 GMT -5
Post by Moro Ashford on Jan 23, 2010 0:44:53 GMT -5
Character Strengths: Tara is a strong willed, self-reliant female who can just as easily get out of trouble as well as save the ass of her companions. Fiery of temper, I love how she doesn't have a problem in letting the boys know this is her show. Character Faults: A charger can do a lot of damage. I don't expect Tara to be crippled from her run in with one (that'd be no fun :[), but I think a few posts recovery time, a dizzying side effect, or some further explanation as to how she could have been feeling would have been good in making her character 'more real'.
Writing Strengths: Having a character that isn't the stereotypical twig-thin, perfectly athletic build is a very realistic character attribute that has, with me, earned a major thumbs up. This has been interwoven into the writing to make Tara a very human, believable character. Writing Faults: The only minor fault I see in your writing is that you take some events too fast. You set up exciting circumstances (i.e., Tara getting grabbed by the smoker) only to resolve them within the same post with relatively little incident. Maybe try less events and fleshing out the details within one post. :]
Improvement from Last time: First evaluation; its looking great so far! Downhill from Last Time:
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1.23.10
Jan 24, 2010 17:18:49 GMT -5
Post by Mason Breaker on Jan 24, 2010 17:18:49 GMT -5
Character strengths: Hot-headed, self-dependent, and definantly in control (Most of the time!), Tara is one chick who definatly has what it takes to survive this apocolypse! Character faults: In her description, you mention that Tara has a fear of blood. That's come up, maybe, once or twice? Now, I don't like the idea of having her freaking out every time she sees blood and gore, and being so caught up in a fight that you ignore that fear is good to me, but see if you can fit in just a bit more depth on that phobia.
Writing strengths: To be added Writing faults: To be added
Improvement from last time: This being the first evaluation, there was no last time! So far, so good! Downhill from last time: N/A
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Tara Luketic
Junior Member
Witch Hunter and Pack Rat
Posts: 71
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1.23.10
Jan 27, 2010 18:11:20 GMT -5
Post by Tara Luketic on Jan 27, 2010 18:11:20 GMT -5
*blushes at the compliments* Aw, thanks, guys! ^_^ *nods* I'll keep those faults/weaknesses in mind. Thanks for pointing them out to me!
XD And sorry I didn't do my evaluations. I completely forgot. XP I promise that I'll do them this Sunday.
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